city kids huddle and chatter
uncertain on their first trip
into the wilds of Colorado
50 miles away from the light pollution
still visible on the horizon, a mimetic sunrise,
home where stars are mere points
human ingenuity competes
with constellations – they look skyward,
importing a perception shift
in daylight they used a compass
at night they are lost silhouettes,
lit by faintest moon,
soon to walk alone
flashlights extinguish,
vestiges of the city lights,
as counselors walk away
single file, at intervals,
becoming touchstones on the path
I’m the last one to leave, ‘look up’
Andromeda, Mensa, Cassiopeia,
Eagle Nebula and Butterfly Cluster
‘find your own star,
a focal point in the night sky,
one bright enough to find
when you return home . . .
wait until your eyes adjust
listen, I’ll call you to me’
there’s palpable tension,
faint traces of fear
ripe predecessor to awe
clouds of hot breath
infuse the air
feet shuffle –
an eternity
first student steps toward me,
tentatively, he tilts his head
‘Oh, it’s real, there –
Ms. Anna, I see it!’
everything is new
in the light of awareness,
an encaustic imprint
on the wax structure of his heart
expanding the possible,
intimating the existence
of his redemptive self
23 years later, a millisecond,
a fleeting thought
in the timespeak of the universe –
I float on the dark side of the mountain,
viewing our Milky Way
remembering his first time . . .
Written for Fred’s excellent Poetics prompt at dVerse Poets Pub on what else could it be but first times: http://dversepoets.com/2012/09/15/poetics-first-times/
oh this is very excellent, talk about palpable. Good work, I am highly impressed.
A lovely surprise visit from you, thank you!
On the dark side of the mountain. I like and have missed you.
Henry :)! I have missed you too.
you never disappoint Anna. Love the merger of the personal experience with the scientific awe and discovery. Really a great response to the prompt. Am thrilled you shared. Thanks
Thank you for triggering the memory, it was a gift. It felt good to reconnect to that moment and his experience.
it is superb for so many serious reasons . . .
most excellent Ms. Anna ;D
Ha, I find I like you calling me Ms. Anna! On a less silly note, thank you, your impressions are valuable to me.
Last night I was out looking at the stars…still so possible here. Every time is a first time!
Wonderful to hear you live in a place where this is possible!
oh wow anna i love this much…there’s so much magic in watching stars and i really wanna go and sit a bit in the dark now, just to feel the vastness of what’s outside there and let it touch me deep within…
Claudia, if I’ve inspired you to want to experience something I take it as the highest compliment :D!
This is lovely Anna. You can feel the disbelief floating away on the awe of first seeing the night sky without city light pollution. Makes me want to go off into the hills tonight!
It’s shocking, they estimate most of the world’s population cannot see the Milky Way! I saw a meteor shower last night and felt intensely for those that cannot, hoping he still finds his star.
It’s true – I’m in a small city in the UK and the countryside is mere minutes away, but all we see here at night is fuzzed out orange lamps turning everything a sickly grey!
That’s really too bad but I’m glad you can get away easily to enjoy the stars.
What a fabulous write this is Anna. To give the gift of learning to someone else is an amazing thing, to give it over something as spectacular as the stars and space is wonderful. We loose so much of it to city lights and miss the awe of it all. Our ancient peoples didn’t have that problem and, maybe they were lucky. The boy must have felt it too. Enjoyed every word of this.
It made the grueling selection process to become and train as a counselor worth it. This was during high school and our training occurred outside in a blizzard with temps dipping to -35F! When we actually had to take students down trails without 4 feet of snow (months later) I was deeply grateful for my compass :). Thank you!
This made me realize I take things for granted where I live. Thanks for the wake up call.
You’re welcome :).
wow i love the night sky and staring up at its vastness…hard to see from all the artificial light but i like outside the city on the side of the mountain myself so i get the view….really nicely done anna…
Thanks Brian, I couldn’t get anywhere with the prompt until I went out alone into the woods last night (the moon wasn’t visible) and saw the Milky Way. Then the memories flooded back.
A poem with universal appeal.
Sometimes that seems like the right path.
A very vivid presentation of the scene, Anna, and of the transformative process. (Been awhile since I looked at a nocturnal satellite pic and all l I can think of is “o god–it’s getting closer’ like a cancer of light eating night.)
Yes, a cancer, uncontrolled and damaging, an apt metaphor. Thanks so much for the visit, I hope your back gets better very soon.
Beautiful….this reminds me of being 10, at a camp in the peak district in the UK….we had to go on a night walk….I was so excited, all those stars….this poem just bought that back Anna….so much nostalgia in this poem
Oh, that personal connection makes me happy I shared this. Thank you, Stu.
so much wonder Anna – starlight showing x x lib
Thanks libithina :)!
“an encaustic imprint
on the wax structure of his heart”
what a perfect image… i love this story, something that, I, having lived always in the country, take for granted, there is so much wonder to see when we open our eyes. Fabulous.
Thanks Kelly, it was one of those lines as yet without a subject until I came across the prompt where it nestled in and took up residence :). I have lived in major cities, tiny towns, outside the US, and in the mountains. I have yet to live by the ocean, maybe one day.
I remember the first time I saw the stars and the Milky Way. It was in Australia, at a friend’s place which was outside of the city of Brisbane near some farms. We went out for a walk after dark and we sat down on this little hillside, and I looked up and was so wow’ed by all I saw. So many stars! I felt what was described in your poem. Coming from a city that is ever bright at night, never saw the sky like that.
Love this poem.
Oh, what a beautiful memory; thank you for sharing it with me. It is very touching.
Very pretty poem, Ana – the scene is very vivid, and it’s so wonderful to share your student’s wonder. k.
Thanks k., I wanted to honor him through the poem; I’m so glad you think it worked well.
everything is new in the light of awareness. I am dancing around this line. I enjoy how you built up to this point, leaving us in awe, as if for the first time. beautiful.
Dancing! Thank you very much, Jane.
What a beautiful memory. I’m jealous of your mountain views.
Thanks Sheila, it’s a gorgeous place to live.
“they look skyward,
importing a perception shift”
Just what your poem is doing with us readers! Wonderful first times. Once in the 1980s I went to Palomar, and the scientists there were already telling us that when LA spread an inch further, the light would be too bright for the telescope. Where is this, are you?
The place with the student was the Balarat Outdoor Education Center outside of Jamestown, CO. I can see the Milky Way from my house. I live on a couple acres in the forest on the dark side of Conifer mountain at 9,640 feet of elevation. I would imagine that LA has certainly spread further (I was just there in December).
away from noise
seeing clearly
wonderful
That it is, I’m sure you’ve seen the Milky Way many times on your adventures!
working as a governess on a cattle station 250k sw of alice springs
the power generator goes off at night so you are in the middle of the black
listening to the night creatures and dazzled by the sky
that was the time i really remember being awed by how different it was to being in town.
How beautiful and intensely life-affirming.