Vishnu and Lakshmi
I am unimaginable, rebirth
Creation unthinkable, promises mirth
Vishnu! Vishnu! Exuberance
Preserver, gift of providence
Rejuvenating Dharma manifest
Color of water-filled clouds, blue and blest
I am contemplation, prosperity
Divine, incarnation, fertility
Lakshmi! Lakshmi! Arise, take flight
With penetrating, keen, true sight
Embodiment blooms from sacred lotus
Shakti’s pure form, love comes into focus
Master of beyond, supreme avatar
Inciter of all dreams, a brilliant star
My love! My love! Kaustubha jewel
Source, dear heart, co-creator who’ll
Infuse atma with glorious pure light
Divali honoring, forever bright
Infinite space this sublime nirvana
Jaganmaatha acts, refines this drama
Entwine! Entwine! Benevolence
Fortune, grace, immortal cadence
Splendor, vigor, strength, rapturous beauty
Kundalini’s magnanimous duty
Linked for the Form for All challenge on Stoccato, hosted by Beth Winter here: http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/17/form-for-all-beth-winter-hosts-staccato-form/. Find out all about the rhyme scheme, syllable restrictions, and see examples by heading over to dVerse Poets Pub.
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Like a great chant, sanskrit poem, incantation. K.
Thank you, I had pieces of the poem but not a whole so I thought the theme would fit the prompt after all.
Anna! your brilliance resplendent!
so much knowledge you have,
your piece is resilient.
so rich this piece in detailed knowledge. the rhythm & rhyme beat in time.
Love that
Entwine! Entwine! Benevolence
Fortune, grace, immortal cadence….
methinks you did a bang-up job.
Thank you Tink! I appreciate you looked further into the underlying symbolism and that the detail appealed.
Wonderfully realized Anna. I became familiar with these deities through my friend Mamata from Nepal. She spoke little English but somehow made me familiar with her rites and beliefs. We are all from God, she told me, all the gods are the one God and we are connected to one another through them. In this form you gave us light, color, and movement. Indeed we dance through the art and through the culture with you. Truly brilliant.
Thank you Gay that’s very kind of you to say. Have you ever seen the marvelous Renoit film The River about a young girl coming of age in India? I think it came out in ’50 or ’51. Your comment reminded me of it and I think you’d enjoy it, she’s a budding poet.
I am contemplation, prosperity
Divine, incarnation, fertility
Clever, clever.
Thank you Margaret.
fascinating anna…i agree, it turns to almost a chanted prayer…you play extremely well within this form…
Thanks Brian, that’s high praise considering this is my first foray into rhyme. I always appreciate your visits.
An excellent take on the Hindu Mythology. Well done!
Thank you very much Mohana.
poem and image are both very beautiful
i love them
and Divali sounds like a gentle celebration
i would be a bit late but do have some candles =)
Yes, I was very excited to find the image, it greatly appealed to the painter in me with all that glorious color. Wonderful it appealed to the painter in you too. I’ve seen pictures from Divali but I’d love to see it in person. Thanks Janet, always lovely to see you.
Anna- I love this! You have enhanced the form with your excellent word choice and woven a delightful read.
Oh, thank you Laurie, that’s wonderful to hear, it’s my first real rhyming poem. Those syllable counts were frustrating and an extra syllable here and there kept sneaking in!
I could imagine from poem and image — a lively dance, lights aflame in hands, the jingle of ankle bells. A wish for the blessings of this pair of deities. Awaken the soul with these qualities. Awesome.
How beautiful Ravenblack. I love your inner movie, so wonderful the words did their job and transported you. Thank you very much!
Anna, really love the piece. It’s entrenched with everything I like. For a first foray into rhyme, it seemed seamless to me, really great job, and I really appreciate the work. Yeah the syllabic structure was difficult I found it incredibly hard, as I had these really good lines and then realized it wouldn’t match the syllable count. But rhyme is always fun in its own way and while it can alter the effectiveness of a piece it can also enhance in the same manner. The thing with rhyme is you have to know how it applies to the individual work as depending on the style of rhyme used it can change what you are trying to say, for good or bad. But I love it and love using it. Really a wonderful job here, thanks:)
Thanks Fred, that makes my day! I certainly appreciate the tips on rhyme. I always love to see you here :).
This is such a natural, magical work, dancing and singing throughout. Your rhyme choice is great. Everything works so well here. With the one exception of the repetition at the start of the sixth line, you have followed this form as if you were born to it. I can’t believe you are new to rhyming — you have rhymed so naturally and appropriately! Very well done!
Ooo, magical, wow, thank you! Yes, up until recently I have resisted rhyme with a passion but it’s important to be open and learn new tricks. I caught the fail of the repeat right after I posted it, next time I’ll know better :).
I adore the subject matter, and you did a fantastic job with the prompt. It’s a tough one.
Thanks Mama Zen, I too love the subject matter so I’m glad that translated.
Just beautiful, almost prayerful. You obviously know your subject.
Thank you Mary, I thought the form would lend itself well to this type of subject, glad you agreed.
Each time I read you, I am more in awe of your talent and knowledge. And each time I read, I learn from you. Thank you.
Your staccato is rich in both meaning and form. I love how you took the form and let the poem speak. The image is fantastic but the poem is also strong enough to sing without it. Fantastic poetry.
Gosh Beth, what a beautiful comment. At the end of a hard day I can’t tell you how much this lifted my spirits. Thank you. Also, I hope your dog is well.
This is my language, Anna. It speaks of awakening souls and deities that represent our different aspects and my youngest daughter is named Lakshmi too–I’m in love with this! You did a wonderful job with this rhyming form–excellent.
Oh, what a gorgeous name for a little girl, thank you for sharing that with me. I always wanted a daughter, I would have named her Sophia Celeste. I’m so happy you enjoyed my call to awakening.
Well, she’s a grown woman now–her older sister is Saraswati! Yes, I was into Indian names–still am. I remember you writing a poem about Sophia Celeste–that too is a beautiful name–I see why you love it.
Another gorgeous name! Oh, yes, you left me that compassionate and beautiful comment on the poem, thank you again for that :).
the ancient gods are smiling upon you, nice write, love all the new words I discovered here
Thank you Christine, it’s nice to meet you.
Deep as usual!
Thank you John, I try.
I keep missing your blog updates, Anna–so sorry. I am going to hit the subscribe button, I think. I loved seeing you do this form which completely kicked me to the curb with such panache, Just a lovely dance, full of the language of the east, which makes it seem even more ritualized than the cadence and rhyme. First stanza is my fave.
Oh please don’t be, I’ve been out of the house a lot lately and I’m sure I’ve missed some of yours. I don’t get sent a notification so I usually stop in to see what you’ve been writing. I’ll be by soon to check for new poems!
I love mythology based poetry. It’s like getting two for one to me. My first in-depth look at Hindu mythology came with the Indiana Jones movies and then Robert Oppenheimer’s speech mentioning the destroyer of worlds. Thank you for another tantalizing taste.
Thank you Yousei, glad it was enjoyable!
I so enjoyed this…and loved all the new words you introduced me to. I can almost picture a Bali dance being done to these words…which is one of my newest favorite dance forms to watch. awesome piece!
Thank you Caty, it’s nice to meet you and I’m so glad you appreciated the dance!
Greetings,
hope all is well,
invite you to join poetry picnic today, simply share a relevant or a random piece, and enjoy!
Happy Thanksgiving,
Always, your presence is sunshine to us.
Best Wishes!
your talent rocks.
xoxox
sorry i’m so late anna…this is great and fascinating from first to last line..and like others i agree on the chanted prayer.. works so well with the staccato form
Thanks so much and I loved your OLN poem, truly.