Digital Art by http://wwwsueann.blogspot.com/ Used with permission
‘I love you as certain dark things are to be loved,
in secret, between the shadow and the soul’*
An engulfing meteor shower writes our passion into existence
I lick the candied drips that streak like star trails to my mouth
fetishizing the geography of your body, its angular geometry
delicacy of a nuanced line skips fire across my face as you trace
words, hot breath infused, bending to the contours of my
desirous curvature, whispers embrace the inner recesses,
a secret that unfurls this singularity, collapsing my life
into this moment, potential energy gathering in our
liminal space, your shadow inscribes its legacy upon my body:
asterisms, pictorial glyphs, symbols of erotic exclamations,
broken chords releasing a neo-lexicon of sound
I want to redraw the lines, drafting scripts of bliss, pour
color upon your skin to transgress the boundaries of your
pleasure threshold, arrive in your mind in ecstatic pictures –
flood your senses, transport you to my inner landscape
words of seductive influence, your ambassadors,
have served you well – first contact of flesh presses their weight
into me, I fade to deepest blue limned with strawberry’s kiss
in a place beyond language, awash in celestial light
* from Pablo Neruda’s Love Sonnet XVII
Linked to dVerse for Poetics: http://dversepoets.com/2012/11/03/poetics-through-the-artists-lens/
oh snap ma’m…this has some heat…smiles…your opening stanza hooked me good…drafting scripts of your bliss….i would like to hear this read, though hearing it read scares me a bit as well….smiles…i might be over come with a blush…smiles….
I was going to read it but wasn’t sure I would recover from the blush, haha. Thanks Brian!
Languorous and sensual – the colors temperatures become a palet(te) of love. Exquisite, my dear!
Thanks Gay, precisely!
Oh, I love this place within love – the sublime euphoria shared between two souls. You’ve expressed it well here. “transport you to my inner landscape”…..hell, yay! {smiles}
Yummy, I’ll take some sublime euphoria. I’m still laughing at your hell yeah :D!
Very sweetly and scrumptiously sensual! Hot, hot, hot.
Thanks Mary, that’s great feedback!
“I want to redraw the lines…. transport you to my inner landscape.” This stanza is my favorite, a piece of ecstatic perfection. I keep rereading it for the soothing, luscious place it transports me- which must be the Archway. “…collapsing my life” also hits sweet home. This is def. one of my faves of yours, Anna.
A favorite, how wonderful, I’m glad it resonated and rang true. Thank you, Jane!
I just loved this, Anna. The intensities of eros, the flaming hues of lust and intimacy are so gorgeously rendered here: “your shadow inscribes its legacy upon my body”….yes, yes, yes! Plus, that bit of Neruda is one of my favorites. Simply delectable.
Thanks Gene, this type of poetry is your specialty so I really appreciate your feedback. I was a bit embarrassed by the intensity to be honest. I love your description of Eros.
WHat you say. Some sensual lines. I like this voice, of course. Very good.
Is that like a version of the joke, ‘That’s what she said’ :)? Thanks Henry, I look forward to reading yours.
Another reason I should not have a computer alone. Can’t wait for your comment. Hint: mine isn’t sexy or funny, unless you think references to Bartleby, the Scrivener, is sexy 🙂
Haha, well I’m sure it depends entirely on the context.
I did read the short story in a spanish version, wrote the poem in a combined french – slavic (Czech) form and translated it to english. So the process did involve some romantic languages. Still not sexy? Okay, I will write sexy next time and leave the dark alone for a week. That should be happy.
The process certainly sounds like mental gymnastics, haha!
I really liked that “collapsing my life”. Beautiful.
Thank you!
very sensual… i shouldn’t have read this – now i sure won’t be able to sleep… haha
wonderful poem!
Haha, how do think I feel, I had to write it!
… and did a very good job! 🙂
Thanks, always lovely to see you.
happy to be back with some time to write – could have kicked myself for missing your prompt – LOVED it! hope to see another one, soon!
I’m usually up once a month so I would love to see you next time. Thanks so much for the feedback!
awesome, hope i won’t miss it! will keep my eyes open (and hopefully my schedule clear)… have a lovely weekend!
Thanks, you too!
OH WOW! I think this is my absolute favorite poem that I’ve read from you! It drew me in right away and made me long for what I don’t have.
Me too :). Thanks Dana, I wrote it in a rush when I got home from a long day so it’s great to know it’s a favorite of yours.
What an intensely passionate piece Anna. Just love the sensuality the words create here, perfectly placed for pacing, which, also adds to the overall tone here. Really good. You know, it’s funny how inspiration works. This piece of art, while I like it, for whatever reason, was the only one of the group that Brian put up on D’Verse that I just couldn’t find something workable for me in poetry, so to see what you found in and from it, I have to say I was actually glad to see you chose this piece, as now, after reading your poem, I now know how to read this painting, guess I just wasn’t looking at it the right way:)
Wonderful to hear the feelings translated well into words, their architecture adding to the pacing. I am happy I saw something in it you didn’t though I’m sure SueAnn could give you a much better read on her intent than I did. In a rare fit of vulnerability I let my feelings overwhelm my intellectual interaction with the art. Thanks so very much for your feedback, I always look forward to it.
fantastic sensuosity — seemed to hope for much more than could ever be had. Like the hoping was most of the pleasure.
I do think that our hopes about love add to our experience of its pleasures. Thanks for stopping in to read. I’ll be returning visits this afternoon.
Very sexy, sensual…transport you to my inner landscape… I’m sure an artist would do something with those words… Lol
Another fab write from you 🙂
Thanks, yes the chromaphile in me had a field day with this prompt :D!
I want to redraw the lines, drafting scripts of bliss, pour
color upon your skin to transgress the boundaries of your
pleasure threshold,
These lines I found had a powerful effect. They picked up the passion that the opening couplet introduced and made it somehow more personal, less amorphous in expression.
I always find it a difficult line as I am attracted to the amorphous. Thank you for the helpful feedback, I look forward to reading yours.
I am familiar with Neruda’s work and often based my poems on his, so I was interested to read your work ~ I like the scientific approach but the end pulled me wonderfully:
I fade to deepest blue limned with strawberry’s kiss
in a place beyond language, awash in celestial light
I like you called it a scientific approach as I didn’t see it until you pointed it out (this one seemed all feeling and no science from my perpective yesterday but I was clearly too close to it then to see the obvious :)). Thank for the compliment on the ending as I went back and forth on those lines more than once. I love Neruda.
This is breathtakingly beautiful and gorgeously erotic. Ok, I am out of adverbs for this one. Loved!
I love adverbs, thank you for these two marvelous ones :).
In a place beyond language….love that most. sensuous and exquisite verses..thanks
Thank you very much, nice to see you again.
Without love a poet’s landscape would be one way hedonism, a slippery descent into mucous and
other bodily fluids, all olfactory without the Gregorian chanting, the flutter of angel’s breath, the soaring, the melding, the intertwining of ego and soul, that moment a man and a woman face eternity as a complete creature, one with a short half life that has to be recreated time and again, until the hormones dry up, the limb ache with ague, and only the mind ascends with the blazing recall of flesh fusion–just saying. Loved your heat, believed the blush.
Wow, this is a feast of a comment, I especially enjoyed ‘flesh fusion’. Thank you.
“arrive in your mind in ecstatic pictures”
Now THERE’s an original and arresting line!
(Fireblossom)
So great to see you again :)!
into this moment, potential energy gathering in our
liminal space, your shadow inscribes its legacy upon my body:
asterisms, pictorial glyphs, symbols of erotic exclamations,
broken chords releasing a neo-lexicon of sound
A lot of energy is released here. Sensuously beautiful Anna!
Hank
Thank you, Hank!
Well, since Brian said it, why not? Let’s hear this read Good stuff. Not easy to do at all. And, yes, very Neruda. People ought to try these things more often. Congrats on this one.
http://chromapoesy.com/2012/11/05/the-archway-recording/ Thanks for seconding Brian’s suggestion about recording.
Passion laced with the cosmic in such an exquisite way.
Thanks very much, lovely to see you again.
Oh my, I felt a strong connection here with Neruda…love the language of love you use here in each line so I won’t repeat the entire lovely poem….we chose the same photo to write about…the colors provoke such strong emotions and drive the imagination…
Thank you, I look forward to seeing how the photo inspired you!
“I’ll have what she’s having.”
Hehe! Wow, Anna! Neruda, one of my top favs! The intensity in which you describe the senses here takes us right to the edge. I listened first (love to hear you read) and then read…both fantastic.
I was completely hooked by the line “I lick the candied drips …”
Perhaps we will experience more of this style from you? Hope so! 🙂
-Eva
Haha, nice allusion! I had a massive migraine today so the recording was actually difficult, wonderful to know the reading worked. I hope so too, right now I’m working on my OLN piece (it will be posted on Carbon Noise) about Hero and Leander. I’m adding the finishing touches, the details of the seduction, now. I’d love your impression of it if you have time later in the week. Thanks so much for the visit and feedback!
Wow… I probably shouldn’t say this but I was aroused by this… Damn you Anna! Beautiful poem and a seductive performance.
I believe writing should be capable of affecting readers so I don’t think I should be damned for it ;). Thank you for your honest response.
No you shouldn’t be damned at all 🙂 I really enjoy your readings Anna. I hope you continue to produce them.
I used to do them more frequently but found no one listens to them, although when they do they tend to understand the work better. Another you might enjoy, Stochastic Intimacy (though I’ll warn you it’s full of math and game theory) is here: http://chromapoesy.com/2011/09/08/stochastic-intimacy/
You are spot on about understanding them better. That is part of the reason I enjoy them.
Inspired and warming!
Thanks for dropping by!
Thank you!