Here are two ridiculously old (one from 10 years ago) poems I am posting in response to the NWCU prompt asking us to silence our critics. To be honest these poems embarrass me and were written for private consumption but what’s more shameful to me is that I gave such power to one of these critics that I didn’t write for several years in reaction. I’ve experienced intense criticism in relationship to all my artistic expression, from a choir director that insisted I stop singing when I wasn’t making a sound, a viewer at a gallery critique who screamed at me so intensely he had to be asked to leave, to often being accused of merely throwing paint on canvas or stringing words together without meaning or purpose although my process is actually methodical, technically precise, and often requires hours upon hours of research.
Now I don’t respond to these attacks or allow them to hinder my experimentation. I recognize that I cannot possibly appeal to everyone and there isn’t a good response to statements like ‘I hate orange. This painting would be tolerable without it.’ or worse, ‘Abstraction is the work of the devil.’ anyway so why waste creation time replying. There is, of course, a huge difference between being torn down and asking for and receiving constructive criticism, a vital part of artistic growth.
for you who held my fragile hopes
i feel you should have been aware
of the power differential and thought
‘here I am holding a precious
and fragile thing’
the glass key that may unlock
the cabinet of her dreams
a Cornell box, the poetry of fragments
at once beautiful and evocative
touchstone to the past,
future imaginings – soul missives sent out ahead
to comprehend at a later date
full of connections and color
a reservoir of meaning
to be mined throughout her lifetime
a home to fall in love with
filled with work that engages, surprises, and delights
reflecting a passionate love of ideas
its purpose shining forth-
a path to a singular destiny
instead you thought, I can only imagine,
that the key was really a phallic symbol
a tool belonging to you
and ‘the procession of the sons
of educated men’
to be used for your glory
a brief egoistic high
your power eclipsing the tiny box
from my perspective it was the universe
it became your private box –
a voyeuristic titillation of jewels
i became another object
to be put in its place
in so doing you broke the key
in your haste to lock the cabinet
and flee the scene of your crimes
“Responding to a powerful instinct of outrage and rebellion put into my soul by God”*
For me, a woman, they warned:
Do not put your words
with those of the great man,
revered throughout the West –
The patriarch who circumscribed men’s souls.
Thereby holding myself up to scrutiny
To him they cried,
“Lay down the gauntlet”
Go forth and be brave!
Set the mountain in front of you
and rise to its heights
How can they see beyond
what has been shown to them?
Their Pavlovian conditioning?
How can they comprehend
that they beat down with their words
though they feel not the sting of contact-
Nor the pangs of culpability?
It is for a man,
THIS man,
these men
to tread upon my soul.
Hard boots on delicate tundra
Is that imagistic enough?
Perhaps a piercing metaphor
would be more apt
I must ask them to leave
this sacred place within me
Visited by so many xenophobic, petty,
and arrogant foreigners
I will not make the invitation again
All those who’ve gone before must away!
These ghosts will not haunt me
* from George Sand’s preface to Indiana
Alternate Titles:
“Cats do not go to heaven. Women cannot write the plays of Shakespeare.” – Virginia Woolf, from A Room of One’s Own
-OR-
How I got kicked out of the writing group (in their rules you weren’t ever allowed to respond to criticism, simply accept it)
Linked to NWCU Wednesday Wake Up Call: http://newworldcreativeunion.blogspot.com/2012/05/wednesday-wake-up-call-290512.html
Responding to your note: On the one hand, yes, let the critics be as they seek their own spot light–and put in journals the anger and hurt. But on the other hand, the ouch of these two poems seems gender political–especially the second one. For that reason, I loved tboth poems and I am grateful that you let me/us read them. You wrap your unique images around the problem so that it can be seen and felt on many levels, before sticking the knife in, the important NO.
I did feel that these particular attacks came from intellectually threatened males. The worst outcome was that the man mentioned in the first poem influenced my desire to apply for a Rhodes Scholarship (I was intensely encouraged by a woman professor I admired to try), something I bitterly regret.
You rock my face off. So proud of you for not lying down & taking the crap.
Oh, this means the world to me!
oh, these are good. I dig them. I didn’t know what to expect from your introduction but yeah, these are very good.
Thanks Jesse :).
Anna, I relate. One time a lady in my writing critique group told me that she would never read my novel. It paralyzed me for a while and I stopped writing until I realized the beginning did need to be reworked and it doesn’t matter when she wrote. These are nothing to be embarassed about, but I know just what you mean. Some of my older ones….ouch.
Oh, I’m sorry to hear that Victoria but glad it all worked out in the end. The poems are embarrassing to me as I didn’t intend to ever share them publicly, they outline very private humiliations.
A glass key, how powerfully fragile–what a wonderful read! I’m glad you didn’t let the critic win, these are marvelous.
Thank you Steve, that’s terribly kind of you to say.
There is nothing to be embarrassed about here. Nothing.
I didn’t think these poems still held emotional power for me but reading your comment I was wrong. I cried, thank you.
anna, you def have nothing to be embarassed about…and ugh, when people tell me stuff like that it rather fires me up to prove them wrong you know…i take crit from those i trust have my well being in mind…i def like to take it on the chin but for good reason…too many are just assuaging their own egos..
The thing that was frustrating about giving up writing is that I had used criticism as fuel to overcome adversity many times before. A particularly important example was ignoring the Head of Admissions at Colorado College when he told me there was no way I’d ever get into the school because they’d never had a GED student in their entire history! I have a GED because I had to go to work at 16 to support my Dad and younger brother and spent two years in the workforce before being able to attend college. However, I had the highest ACT score in the entire state (99th percentile overall) and was in the 99th percentile nationally for the GED too. Along with a flood of recommendations not only did I get in but they gave me scholarships. Why did I three years later listen to this man I hardly knew who didn’t even teach at my college? Live and learn :).
two old poems:
it is ok to be old and alive?
without apology?
powerful audience:
life/art is a dangerous discourse.
i understand. i am not writing poetry.
spotlights from different perspectives
draw their own conclusions
Janet, you always reply with sagacity. I did feel like I broke the blogging rules today by putting out old and personal material {a funny feeling}. ‘Life/art is a dangerous discourse’ veracity in that statement and one I needed to hear today. Thank you!
as sarah suggested. rock on Anna. thanks for the visits =)
She’s my amazing cousin :). Loved seeing your work!
Anna…I could share a ton of commonalities with you in regards to your story (but you did a hell of a lot better overcoming the “:hurdles”) I found the pieces to be raw and honest and please believe me that you are not alone in your tears. The ways we can be undermined, especially in our creative endeavors never ceases to amaze me. I tried to ignore it and stifled myself in the process. It frustrates me to no end, that the sensitive souls and hearts that create the beautiful words and images around me are pieces of those people, those creators…and how a person could take any satisfaction in destroying passion is beyond me. I honor you for opening up these pieces for us to see…their brilliance, their passion…and I thank you for not letting them win 😉
Tash, you’re a beautiful person whom I deeply admire. Thank you for everything you do to encourge creativity in its myriad forms!
On one of your alternative titles — I was part of poetry workshop forum where they don’t allow poets to respond to the crits or rather, argue against them. I learned a lot there and can see their reasoning, but I grew to disagree with that policy. Sometimes you need to fight for your work, and sometimes, then it becomes clearer to yourself why you wrote it the way you did, and better see why you should change it if you think you should. Anyway, I left that community because I found that I ended up writing in the way to be accepted rather than my own way, which proved rather destructive. Maybe it works for some people. For me, just part of the learning journey.
Appreciated you sharing these. 🙂 So glad you’re here.
Interesting that you were in a group like that too, I was worried that may be the outcome. I would have stuck with it but it was clear that the gender issue was going to continue to be a problem. I’m so glad you’re here :). You give immensely better feedback!
Girl, you are a Queen, Off with their heads. One of my greatest beefs ( I think is the word) are ignorant, biased comments treading on freedom of expression. If a reader doesn’t want to put the work in to visualize a point of view, then be gone. I wrote a poem on prejudice this week, writing on similar grounds. I identify. Great poems. You’ll always be one of my favs. I know you are grown, but let me know next time someone attacks your creativity, or freedom, I have a sabor and a steed and a sharp pen. I’ll have ur back. Keep writing.
Will do Henry. I’m pretty capable on a horse so I’ll have your back too :)!
Anna, really, you have nothing to be embarrassed about here, both of these pieces are fantastic. Whoever told you to stop, was nothing but a fool. While I do agree that women should not try to occupy…lol I can’t even finish that joke- lol but the second piece is extremely strong and potent, the first piece is like nothing I ever read from you, not in any particular light, just different tones and style, which I love seeing completely different sides to a poets center and happen to really love this for that, and how just in these two pieces, we can get a glimpse to the early formations of how your poetry is today, fascinating, really. Could’ve used a few extra monosyllabic words, but 🙂 Awesome work. especially for being ridiculously old 🙂
Yes, I expected nothing but sexist blather from you 😉 – lol. The professor that wrote me a letter read much older poems (that first one is a response to his letter written some 6 years after the fact, my gripe finally aired) than these. The letter started ‘The best editors hate the work of the writers they represent. While I cannot ascribe to hating your writing…”. I got the humiliating bomb at the student center, many months late, and promptly left the three pages in the trash so at least I couldn’t pour over it at a later date. It is interesting to see how these pieces are similar and different from what I do today. I always prefer current work and am generally future oriented so this looking back feels awkward. Thanks Fred, I’ll get right to work on incorporating those monosyllabic words :).
woops, meant to say multi lol
Worked either way 🙂 – lol.
it’s always so hard to open ourselves up to criticism, poetry especially comes from the heart, and leaves us vulnerable. i love your work, these and everything i read of yours… you have a wonderfully unique perspective, abstract is always more difficult to pull off than realism, when you do it well, it looks easy from the outside.
i once took a poetry class with a famous female poet. she was mean and bitter, she made several women in the class cry, and when a male in the class said he liked the work i read, her response was “you’re just saying that because she’s beautiful!” (which i am not, but that is beside the point, she was so dismissive and cruel and i have never forgotten the sting of those words.)
all that to say, i am glad you kept writing, painting, working through it all. you are an artist in every sense of the word. a vanguard.
Ouch, why do people tear down others in such personal ways? She didn’t provide any constructive criticism that would contribute to artistic growth. Clearly she viewed you as a rival. How horrid she was and to call you out in front of the class (for something that has nothing to do with your work) is inexcusable. Makes me want to bite her but she might enjoy that! Kelly, you are an immensely talented poet/artist and a wonderful human being whom I look to as a role model. I am convinced you are beautiful inside and out :).