Enraptured Subtleties Caressing MP3 (click on this link to hear the poem read)
Calligraphic signifiers rouse masterful enumerators
while language seduces inscribed astral bodies
with pneuma piqued by enraptured subtleties caressing phosphorus membranes
upon tetrahedral ascetics performing ignoble traversals over Gaussian eliminations
filled with fatuous genuflections
meanwhile bold succulent hedonists nuzzle watchful questioning contrarians
into a tremulous daring surrender
jousting firm convictions encircled by kyriarchy
infatuated with a once pellucid order blown apart in the mysterium tremendum
that whispers bouquets of adoration and certitude unending
concede merge meld
suck wonder and lyrical promises
floating in ephemeral delirium
buoyed by shocking avidity penultimate
wrapped in desirous glowing sensual unraveling
ha. you sure know how to spin words…only one i had to look up…def get the points for big words today, but pleasing to the ear…
Thanks, I hope you get a chance to listen to it. The beauty of the language is intended to make the experimental nature of the work more accessible.
“upon tetrahedral ascetics performing ignoble traversals over Gaussian eliminations” wow. IMO you break down lines pretty far, even down to shape and blur. Great wordplay! Thank you
Thanks, I particularly enjoyed writing that line. The process of experimenting and breaking down is my attempt to reframe how we approach poetry. Sometimes I fall on my face but I love to play with language.
i would love to hear you reading this – it has the same endless feeling as the ocean’s whispering..
Claudia, just click on Enraptured Subtleties Caressing MP3 to hear me reading it. I thought it might help make it more accessible.
wow, great job
The use of language – the combination of words – wow. And they float around and frame that photo.
Thanks, I hadn’t thought about them floating around the frame; I love that image.
amazing write, you know how to capture ones attention from word one.
Thank you for your thoughtful comment. I’m thrilled it captured your attention!
Gorges poem and as others say, you are a master for words. I enjoyed finding your poem and looking up new definitions. 🙂
nuzzle watchful questioning contrarians into a tremulous daring surrender
jousting firm convictions encircled by kyriarchy
Amazing verses.
Thank you for engaging my poem. I love learning new words, for me it’s part of the joy and exploration of the art of poetry. It’s wonderful that you also enjoy this process.
Enjoyed the reading, and it does make the words perform to their full extent, using the spoken medium, enhancing things. I love the combinations–fatuous genuflections, succulent hedonists–this is a bouquet of images, each one an individual rose of many petals.
Thanks so much for listening to the recording, I’m looking forward to reading your sestinas this afternoon.
Way above my tiny brains ability to understand without getting out my biology book and/or dictionary… BUT I ADORED your MP3 reading of it… the words were magically entertained and stunningly beautiful. Music, really.
How wonderful you enjoyed the recording. I’m also a composer and singer so your comment about music was lovely to hear. Thank you.
I truly enjoyed how some of these word phrases umped from the page and into the space between my screen and my face. a fine example is the final line.
I feel whispers of the tide… stunning… silently transforming.
“while language seduces inscribed astral bodies” – seducing more than the merely astral, the language and the flow of your words here seduce the ears as well. Vibrant and delectable, the work reads smoothly by the eye, but to lean back and listen to it read truly bears its full potential. Splendid word play – it caresses every bit as much as the waters captured in Hardy’s image. A fine piece.
Now I’m blushing.
It was lovely to read and even better to hear read. Your word play is quite enthralling.
Dear Anna…
Ok I had to some time check the meanings of few words.. but in the end it was a wonderful verse… I liked it…
thanks for sharing…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/05/whispers.html
Thank you for hosting a wonderful potluck!